User:Frog231/Johnson & Johnson/LLonergan802 Peer Review

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Frog231
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 * User:Frog231/Johnson & Johnson
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 * Johnson & Johnson

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead has been updated and portrays the new content that is being added to the paper. Frog231 introduces the main part of what was found through doing there research and then provides information briefly into what he is going to dive into. Frog 231 could be a little more specific on there information in the lead to show that it is not promotional but overall very strong.

The author does a good job of providing some information about vaccines and why they are often overlooked as a vital part of emissions and the impact that they have. With that being said Frog 231only states that the lightbulbs they used in there buildings have been committed to be more eco friendly and that they are going to lessen there global impact. I don't understand how they plan on taking back there emissions though. This is important as it can be complicated to understand where there biggest emissions are and how they can then cut back on the amount of emission that they have.

All the sources that are used are secondary and good sources that provide information about the Covid 19 pandemic and provide good and responsible data from a good source.

Organization is good throughout the whole article, it provides the reader with everything that is needed and starts with an intro and goes into a supporting paragraph and another "so what paragraph" to end it. I think that there can be another paragraph added after teh second one to provide more information and argue the importance of what Johnson&Johnson are doing to help with climate change and action.

No current images added in the sandbox. There are good images on the wiki page so not necessary but could be helpful to find stuff from Covid-19 pandemic and add it to the sandbox part of the article to add more information and eye appealing images.

Overall very strong addition I would just add a little more about what they did during covid and there shots to help with climate change and making a change. Tone and everything was strong ad definitely a strong intro start to a addition to the article.