User:FryWrites/Jane Eyre/BornUnderPunches Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Angrycabbagemerchant, FryWrites


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:FryWrites/Jane_Eyre?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Jane Eyre

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead- The lead for this section does a good job of explaining the themes that the section will be discussing and does not take up too much room. I would suggest linking the wikipedia for Colonialism so that the audience can familiarize themselves.

Content- The content for the section is good and there is a good deal of information being offered to the reader, and the articles you've cited do a good job of supporting the paper

Tone and Balance - I think there needs to be some work done to make it clear that the arguments being presented are specifically from the author's you are citing. I think using more quotes from the texts and stating before a potentially controversial statement where the info is coming from will be helpful to the audience.

Sources- I think you have a plentiful amount of sources, although I think it might be easier in the future to use the citation tool to link your citations in the text, that way you don't have to write page numbers or authors names every time.

Organization - I don't think I have any critiques concerning the organization, but you might find it helpful to break up the paragraphs a bit more as to make the text less intimidating to the reader.

Overall Impression- This is a good draft, and I think the edits that I've proposed are easy fixes that won't require too much effort. good job!