User:FryWrites/Jane Eyre/Turquoise98 Peer Review

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FryWrites


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 * FryWrites/Jane_Eyre?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Jane Eyre

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) Lead - You have a very strong introductory paragraph with neutral claims that you continue to support throughout the body paragraph. I think you have a really great balance and you truthfully really don't need to make any changes here, nice work!
 * 2) Content - Your content is great overall, however I do think that you lack references and citations in this section. Your introduction is very heavy with citation, while I think your body lacks that and could use a few more sentence with specific quotes from the readings. It's great content, I just think this could strengthen it and beef it up a bit if you added some specific quotes here. Otherwise, I think it is still a good start to your draft.
 * 3) Tone and Balance - Your tone is great and you make it clear who is speaking and you do a great job with introducing your sources. However, I do think you could have a little more balance if you added more references during your body section. It seems super heavy with sources in the beginning and then it thins a little as it continues. I think this is an easy addition, and other than that minor aspect, your tone and balance is pretty strong.
 * 4) Sources - Your sources are strong, I just think you could add more specific quotes during the body. I know you do reference them in the body, I just think you could pull in a few more specific quotes from each that would help strengthen it a bit.
 * 5) Organization - I think your organization looks great, and flows nicely throughout, I don't think there are any noticeable changes that really need to be done for this aspect.
 * 6) Overall, there are strong references and aspects of colonialism, with the exception of a few minor changes. These changes are easy fixes and I think will ultimately just strengthen the already strong draft, excellent job!