User:Ftalebhaghighi/Audiovisual Archives/Bellestar12 Peer Review

General info
Ftalebhaghighi
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ftalebhaghighi/Audiovisual_Archives?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
Wow, props to you for doing a whole article on Audiovisual Archives. In the intro part, you gave a very in-depth, clear context and definition of your topic. I appreciate the layout of the definition/significance of your topic, followed by the principles and standards of audio archiving. There isn't much I can say that needs to be changed but I did notice some word choice instances that could be re-worded to flow better for the reader. For example, you have a sentence: "Since audiovisual records capture a wide range of information beyond that which may be found in written forms and act as effective, direct means of communication, they are included in official programs." It is worded a bit backward almost, I would suggest something like: "Audio/visual records are included in official programs given that they act as an effective, direct means of communication and are able to capture a wide range of information beyond what is capable of written forms." Purely just a suggestion, as it comes across as easier to read, it's a small grammar thing. Your references look really great too, you have a lengthy list, which helps provide validity to your article. Curious to see what else you add to your article. Looks really great so far.

Response to peer review:
In response to Bellestar12 Peer Review, thank you very much for your comment, I welcome the correction of the sentence you mentioned and will use the sentence you suggested.

In the next steps, I would like to add a text about the formats that can be used in audio-visual archives before the topic of standards.