User:Fudgevillain/Grey years/Totoama Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Fudgevillain


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Fudgevillain/Grey years


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Grey years

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: the lead is of good length and adequately summarizes the article for the reader. It quickly and concisely provides the reader with some basic, key information that will be expanded upon in the lower sections.

Content: The content in this article is well written and and adequately expressed. It is simple to understand and learn from, especially if one is unaware or unknowledgeable of the topic being discussed. The article does well in providing some context in the background section that set up the rest of the information provided. Furthermore, the addition of an implication section expands upon that knowledge by showing the effects of the grey years in the future of the nation and how such policies continued while others fell or evolved. The inclusion of a conclusion section also improves upon the original article by providing reasoning for the ending of the Grey Years period while remaining neutral.

Tone and Balance: Overall, there isn't much to be said in this regard. The tone remains neutral throughout and the article does a great job of balancing all relative points of informations. However, in the "developments" section, it may prove beneficial to expand by including information on further policies and reactions throughout the grey years. As of currently, the section focuses greatly on the influence Herberto Padilla's writing had on the beginning of the grey years, but it feels lacking in discussing the policy as the time passed and the grey years came to end.

Sources and references: The sources are diverse and credible, and all of the information is appropriately cited. The in text references to other articles provide great resources for the reader seeking to learn more of the subject or understand the topic further.

organization: This article is much more balanced and organized than the original. The information flows and links together more efficently

As a basically new article, this article does meet the requirements of wikipedia.