User:Fukaohashi/Mothers of the Plaza de Mayo edits/Devyanidhar Peer Review

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Peer Review: Mothers of Plaza Del Mayo

Lead:

Since the author is adding sections to an already existing article, there is not much to review on the lead section of the article. However, an inclusion in the form of a brief sentence discussing the current genetic testing & AI technology being used to locate missing children in the lead would be helpful.

Content:

The content added is relevant to the article since it shows the current efforts made by the Grandmother’s of the Plaza Del Mayo to locate children missing from the revolution. However, I am assuming that the content is “current '' because it discusses AI technology which is a fairly new technology development. The article addition(s) could benefit from the inclusion of dates detailing when exactly DNA testing & AI technology started being used as modes of locating missing children.

Tone & Balance:

The tone of the content added is fairly neutral throughout. However, one specific case of potentially non-neutral language is the use of the word “revelation” to describe the discovery of the identity of a missing child. “Revelation” has religious connotations and what is considered to be a “revelation” is often highly subjective. Therefore, I think the word “discovery” might be a more neutral descriptor. Other than this, the article does not attempt to “persuade” me to a certain position and there are no underrepresented/nor overrepresented perspectives in the article.

Sources & References:

One major pitfall of the content is its lack of in-text sourcing. Many of the claims made by the article are missing in line citations that source the information. There also is no inclusion of a bibliography for me to evaluate the validity or neutrality of the sources used to write the content. Some places where I believe an in-text citation would be helpful are:


 * 1) A citation for the information on the discovery of the son of Cristina Navajos & Julio Santucho
 * 2) A citation for information on the work done by revolutionaries Cristina Navajos & Julio Santucho
 * 3) A citation for the information provided on the abduction of Cristina Navajos & her childbirth during that time.
 * 4) A in-text link to the Grandmothers of the Plaza Del Mayo’s public archive
 * 5) A in- text link to the “iabuelas” Instagram page
 * 6) Overall, more in-text citations for information included on both genetic testing & AI-generated faces.

Organization:

The content is fairly easy to read, however there are moments where the flow seems a bit choppy and information is a bit disjointed. Additionally, there are some grammar errors such as the use of “which” instead of “who” on line 5 of the content, and the lack of specificity in “such cases” on line 3. Otherwise, the content is broken up in a clear manner; I found the separation of the “Genetic Testing” from the “AI generated” testing to be helpful.

Images & Media

There are no inclusions of images & media.

Overall Impressions:

The article could benefit from more in-line citations & a diverse/credible bibliography. Additionally, a revision of the grammar would help the article flow more clearly. The strengths of this article lie in its organization into two sections, and its clear presentation of the content.