User:Funkyfreshadventurer/Lois Elizabeth Schaefer/NortheasternUEnvironment Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Funkyfreshadventurer


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Funkyfreshadventurer/Lois_Elizabeth_Schaefer?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
User Funkyfreshadventurer has made good progress in creating a new Wikipedia entry for the American flutist Lois Elizabeth Schaefer.

The structure, length, and detail of the article seem appropriate and adequately in depth, covering her early life, career, and later life. The lead of the article is succinct and does a good job providing a high level overview of Schaefer.

For the "Early Life" section, I would recommend renaming to "Early Life and Education."

Proper links to relevant Wikipedia entries still need to be added.

It may be worth trying to find another fact or anecdote similar to the Stars and Stripes one to help bolster this article so it doesn't run the risk of not meeting Wikipedia's relevancy guidelines.

On a separate note, I loved this entry and learning about Lois Schaefer! I think the flute is one of the most underrated instruments and has been used in some of my favorite pieces of music like the aria Buss' und Reu' from Bach's St. Matthew Passion. Also love the BSO so much! NortheasternUEnvironment (talk) 06:08, 10 December 2021 (UTC)