User:GGHTOO/Ancient Egyptian architecture/MVisic Peer Review

General info
GGHTOO
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:GGHTOO/Ancient_Egyptian_architecture?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ancient Egyptian architecture
 * Ancient Egyptian architecture

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content added so far about the Ramesseum temple is relevant to the article's topic of Ancient Egyptian Architecture. The information appears to be from a variety of sources, both older and recently updated sources such as the Britannica article. Your contribution addresses one of the sections of the article that needed improvement, or in this case, additional information added. The content all seems to be neutral and there are no biases are claims that attempt to be persuasive. The only part that could potentially be seen as not neutral is the phrase "former glory" in the second sentence. All of the content is supported by a reliable source and each of the citations have properly functioning links. One of the sources is recent (Britannica) while the others have older publication dates. There are also no major grammatical errors or spelling issues that I can see. My only suggestion is to perhaps try and use the phrase "there was also" less, it is repetitive and can appear redundant when used so many times within one paragraph. This will help with clarity and conciseness.