User:GGLOL1600/Cheating in online games/LodFod Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Akul (Yuhcool) and Ivan (GGLOL1600)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:GGLOL1600/Cheating_in_online_games?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cheating in online games

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead section is much more informative, and now is a much better synopsis of the article content, setting up not only the technical aspects of cheating but also the legal implications which are later discussed in the article.

It seems that in the sections the edits are a lot smaller, but upon first read everything seems relevant to the subject matter. I’m not sure exactly how it would look, but one of the criteria s checks whether the article addresses wikipedia’s “equity gap”. This is the only criteria where I’m not sure i can see representation.

The tone is neutral and balanced, and does not seem to push a certain agenda.

I think the biggest thing needed for this article (as you are both probably aware) is better sources. At least in the draft, the only reference to a source is the “better source needed” superscript. Though the points are clear, sources (even from prominent gamers and gaming companies) might be useful to help affirm the statements made.

Organizationally, the article is well written. I can’t tell if the Anti-cheat section will replace the Anti-cheating… section in the original article, but if so then maybe that could be expanded. Other than that, this is well written and a good example of an article.