User:GV184/Crotalus viridis/Andrewvannice Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

GV184


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:GV184/Crotalus_viridis?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Crotalus viridis

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead of the article is unchanged, and the existing lead is of good quality.

The content added is relevant and up to date, however the information about owls mimicking the prairie rattle snake seems a bit more useful on a page about burrowing owls, rather than on the page for the snake.

The information is presented in a neutral manner, and does not attempt to persuade or be biased.

The content cites and is backed up by reliable sources: peer reviewed scientific papers. The content about migration patterns in prairie rattlesnakes doesn't seem to quite match up with the information in the article. The article suggests that rattlesnakes have better body condition but higher mortality rates when moving straight, and that the snakes movement's become more tortuous in human-dominated environments, meaning they survive more, but end up in worse condition afterwards which may lead to problems with overwintering survival or reproductive success. The content being added, however, states that tortuous migration patterns lead to less mortality and better body condition, which disagrees with the source. The content also suggests that rattlesnakes always prefer tortuous migration patterns, but the source suggest that the snakes tend to favor certain patterns depending on what is more beneficial to them. The sources are up-to-date and representative of the current body of literature on the topic. Links work properly.

The content overall is well-written, however a comma should be added between "dangerous" and "flee". The second sentence begins with "Rattle snakes prefer" The source only discusses Prairie Rattle snakes, so it would be more precise to begin with "Prairie rattlesnakes prefer..."

The image being added is relevant to the first sentence, but feels a bit out of place in the context of the whole article. The image's caption should be capitalized and could also be worded more concisely.

The content being added does contribute to the article as a whole overall. I think that the information could be a bit more focused; the information about migration patterns feels more interesting and relevant than the information about the owls. Personally, I would like to see an additional sentence to provide some needed context and/or explanation as to why this migration pattern is favored or avoided by the snakes in different environments.