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https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:GZhen/Evaluate_an_Article?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_evaluate_article

Sources:

-  Jayme Dozier. “Investigating Directional Characteristics in Swipe Patterns on Fabrics.” Journal of forensic identification 70.2 (2020): 205–218. Print.

- Williams, Elisabeth M. P.; Graham, Emma S.; Jermy, Mark C.; Kieser, David C.; Taylor, Michael C. (2019-03). "The Dynamics of Blood Drop Release from Swinging Objects in the Creation of Cast‐off Bloodstain Patterns". Journal of Forensic Sciences. 64 (2): 413–421. doi:10.1111/1556-4029.13855. ISSN 0022-1198

- de Bruin, Karla G., et al. “Improving the Point of Origin Determination in Bloodstain Pattern Analysis.” Journal of Forensic Sciences, vol. 56, no. 6, Nov. 2011, pp. 1476–1482. EBSCOhost, doi:10.1111/j.1556-4029.2011.01841.x.

-   Camana, Francesco. “Determining the Area of Convergence in Bloodstain Pattern Analysis: A Probabilistic Approach.” Forensic science international 231.1 (2013): 131–136. Web.

Wikipedia Peer Review Criticisms:

- Lead section criticism may give readers a bias towards the subject before getting a chance to read through the rest of the article

- Word choice/ sentence structure is a little choppy and doesn't seem to flow well

Response/ Changes to make:

- The last paragraph in the lead section definitely does have some strong wording that can be fixed. Although I don't find an issue with including criticisms in the lead section since it is a major section in terms of the article as a whole I still think I can definitely make some changes to the wording so that it doesn't evoke feelings of doubt while the reader is reading it.

- In terms of flow, I think the issue would be that when I was writing the article I looked through so many different sources that I lost track of keeping flow and instead focused on presenting unbiased information. I can definitely rewrite or rephrase some things in order to add more flow so that the sentences are not as choppy.