User:G Kielkucki/Hypodermic Needle Model/Beauchateau9 Peer Review

I feel that the lead concisely and pointedly introduces the question that the author is posing. The lead does not, however, describe the topic for those who are unfamiliar with it. The Article body does an excellent job of explaining and introducing the debate. The second paragraph of the body does another excellent job of explaining the authors point. However, the body feels biased against the Hypodermic Needle Model and both paragraphs seem to argue against the model. It seems like the information is based upon sources, but I don't know how to tell which information belongs to which source.

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