User:G Kielkucki/Hypodermic Needle Model/Freyaus Peer Review

General info
(Hypodermic Needle Model)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:G Kielkucki/Hypodermic Needle Model - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Hypodermic needle - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) Lead start is strong, possible give the definition of passive audience right away.
 * 2) All the following topics are very relevant to the information. I like that examples are used.
 * 3) Missing in text citations throughout the write up. Reference page looks good. Very easy to add in-text just need hit "cite" on the tool bar and it does for you. All citations look legit.
 * 4) The Wikipedia article has a "history" paragraph. This could be added as an extra body.
 * 5) Clear organization for the information given. Good flow...
 * 6) No images however I also don't have imagines so think all is good there.
 * 7) I like how questions were asked they were then answered.
 * 8) All in all, in-text citations needed to be added and possible a history of the model. Other than looks great and very original compared to the page I found online.