User:Gabelayug/Immigrant health care in the United States/Molleighroy Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gabelayug


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gabelayug/Immigrant_health_care_in_the_United_States?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Immigrant health care in the United States

Content
The contributions include updated information under the 'women' subcategory of 'Demographics'. I think the content added is relevant at to the article as it provides information about immigrant women and their access to health. The contributions explores documentation status as well as sexual, reproductive, and general health and medical issues. The section that provides different research is a bit difficult to read as it is just a large list of information. I think this is a very important section and contribution and it could possibly be organized in an easier way to digest the important information. I think it was an important contribution to add that there is little research done on this specific subject and why. It is so important that articles like this are being contributed to. The added content of my classmate further expands the information on immigrant women in the United States when it comes to accessibility to health care.

Tone and Balance
While this is an emotional topic and one that can elicit anger and fear, the contributions added remain neutral in tone. If i had to write about this subject matter I think it would be difficult to focus on reporting facts and remaining unbiased with my tone. I commend my classmate for being able to do this!

Sources and References
It looks like only one source was added by my classmate to supply all of this information for the content added. It seems to be a reliable secondary source that cites the original sources. The data is laid out in the secondary source in a way that is very easy to understand and translates well for the article. I think my classmate did a great job at relaying the information from the chart in the source to paragraph form for the article, I think maybe it could be reorganized in an easier to read way for the viewer. Right now it is a bunch of data all mumbled together. Very important data though! The source provided is written by many reliable people and provides accurate and relevant information.

Organization
I think that the organization of the content flows really well with the original content that already existed. Again, the paragraph with a list of data from the sources is very important and should be kept in the content, but I think it could potentially be rewritten to make it easier to digest the information. I like where my classmate decided to add the information, it works well with the progression of learning about immigrant women's access to healthcare. The last paragraph is a great conclusion to that subcategory of information under demographics. It lets the reader know that there is still a lot of information that we don't know when it comes to healthcare for immigrant women in the United States and why that is.

Overall Impressions
Overall, I think that the information provided from my classmate is very important and substantial. It adds data and context that helps us better understand the health care situation for immigrant women in the United states. This is a large article that is very complex and important, I think it was a great idea to focus on one specific subcategory and work on improving it. Great job and wonderful article selection! This is really important work you're contributing!