User:Gabigravina/Gender and religion/Brittanyhchan Peer Review

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Gabigravina
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Beginning with your lead section, you improved it in a way that makes it interesting while also explaining the content of the article. However, I would recommend lessening the use of "we" to create objectivity. Also, for the first sentence of the section, it might be helpful for readers if you begin with a definition of what gender and religion is. Other than that, your lead section is concise and detailed enough.

The content of your article displays great potential. You have worded them colorfully and you have applied smooth transitions. I suggest that it would help readers see the importance of the topic by utilizing more examples, and when you do, be in-depth with the description. To improve the flow of your article, it could be helpful to divide them into sections that allow readers to know what each paragraph will be talking about.

Thus, for the tone and balance, you should add more detail in the contexts that you do for your descriptions. Particularly when you mentioned the tendency for women to adopt their spouse's religion, you can try to provide a reason by an expert or a statistic to establish credibility. Moreover, it would also help establish more objectivity by using neutrally toned words.

Overall, by adding more detailed descriptions or context, your article will be great. I enjoy reading your writing as it is interesting. Just a few things that needs improvement is your tone and the evidence that you use in the article.