User:Gabriellam19/talk

Evaluation of Persepolis eval. (Chase Shea)

 * I agree that the character list does not have as much information as there should be. For example, I agree that the omission of Frau Doctor Heller should not be looked over, and we should include this in our edits.  I think that there are other problems with the character list as well, and that is something that I am focusing on in my own edits.
 * The genre section is definitely confusing as you point out the many ways that they clarify Persepolis.
 * However, I do not necessarily think that they need to remove all of the terms that are used to describe the book. Instead, they need to clarify that these words are synonyms and they can be used interchangeably.
 * The "Reception" section definitely needs additions that balance out much of the negativity that is found within the section.  Your additions of positive reception help to create this balance.  However, I feel like the tone in some of your writing implies a bias.  For example, when you say "Persepolis has turned into an important part of literature which connects the Western and Iranian world" I think that this implies that it is your belief.  Maybe if you said "Many scholars believe that Persepolis has turned into an important part of literature...."  There are other sentences that hold a similar structure and imply the same sort of bias but I think that this is an easy fix.