User:Gac8cx/Vesto M. Slipher/Yeulefan4l Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gac8cx


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gac8cx/Vesto_M._Slipher?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Vesto M. Slipher

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) The draft does a good job of keeping a neutral tone. There are no instances within the draft where the editor inserts a personal opinion or tries to paint a picture from non-factual statements.
 * 2) There are some grammatical errors:
 * 3) See the second paragraph where century is misspelled and I believe there ought to be a comma after "centaury" (I could be wrong I am not an English major).
 * 4) More sources could be added at the ends of each sentence might be a good idea.
 * 5) The sources that are included are perfectly added with all the right content and even the pages where the information was obtained from.
 * 6) I like that you plan to add a picture after some of the content. I think a picture after the third paragraph would also help for visualization.

Piper's Response to Yeulefan4l's Peer Review
I appreciate the supportive comments regarding our article. I will respond to the peer review based on the numbered points.


 * 1) No need for change, thank you for input.
 * 2) I edited that small grammatical error and added the comma.
 * 3) I will not be adding sources after each sentence, at least in the portion I did (Discoveries) because I find it redundant. The source linked at the end is the same for the source in the following sentences.
 * 4) No need for change, thank you for input.
 * 5) I do plan on adding that picture when I find time to work. I agree with this comment and appreciate it.

Garrett's Response to Yeulefan4l's Peer Review

1 - N/A

2 - I have fixed the misspelling and the comma was added.

3 - We will continue adding sources as necessary. It may not be needed after every sentence because sometimes a few sentences in a row are from the same page of a single source.

4 - N/A

5 - As we continue to add more information about topics not thoroughly explained in the original article, we will add more pictures to aid the reader in understanding the content.