User:Gailelliott/1999 Hector Mine earthquake/Bcmcelwee03 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gailelliott


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * 1999 Hector Mine earthquake


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gailelliott/1999_Hector_Mine_earthquake?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
Draft so far has made good edits to the run-on sentences of the pre-existing article, making it easier to understand with addition of more information.

It may be beneficial to add more specific information about the "many pre-existing faults in the region." Specifically where they are located and what they are. Or add a link to an article about faults for readers who may not know what they are. The phrase "several kilometers" could also be made more specific. All in all, the article draft is not bias and has well-formatted information, great start!

Abigail's Response
Thank you for your feedback! I think we will definitely elaborate on those things that you mentioned like describing the faults or the several kilometers for example. I think it is a very smart idea to put in a link with the word "fault" so people who are new to the topic will be able to understand more of the article. The run-on sentences of the original article has been one of our projects to fix so I am glad that it is looking good! that is something that we will continue to view and correct as we get closer to the due date of our final project for this class.