User:Gakeiiyyh/Gender-based price discrimination in the United States/Mundozurdo Peer Review

General info
Gakeiiyyh
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gakeiiyyh/Gender-based price discrimination in the United States
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gender-based price discrimination in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

I think the changes to the lead section are super great, especially as you make the text much more legible and concise! The peer draft guide asks whether the lead includes a "brief description of the article's major sections" but I don't think that including such a summary is necessary in this case. Moreover, I agree with your decision to move some of the parts in the lead to the price disparity example section.

Content, Tone and Balance

All in all, the additional content/corrections are well-written and definitely reflect the neutral perspective that Wikipedia asks for. I did notice that the full article has a substantial amount of additional sections and there are a few areas where some of the content is a bit repetitive. Insofar as your article addresses gender-based inequality and discrimination, I think it is fair to say that your contributions narrow the equity gap; if you have time it might be interesting to make note of the interactions between gender and other characteristics/identities that mediate how (which?) folks differentially navigate the economy.

Sources

With respect to your original contributions, I see the added citation and I would imagine that your other changes don't necessarily require new sources as it's a revision of the existing article. A cursory look at the reference page on the published article shows that the sources are largely consistent with one another and it may be worth seeing if there are any in need of fixing.

Overall Impression

Really awesome job!! I think your contributions have a sizable effect on comprehension and clarity. Your original contributions provide some good nuance and don't detract from the article's overarching discussion on gender-based price discrimination. My only question is about whether you plan on changing/adding/subtracting any of the remaining sections in the original article. Otherwise, I think this article will be in really strong shape once you've published all your edits. Thanks! - Andrew