User:GalaticPanda/Harriet Boyd Hawes/Sunfloweryellow007 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

GalaticPanda


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:GalaticPanda/Harriet_Boyd_Hawes?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Harriet Boyd Hawes

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has not been updated; perhaps talk about how she was a professor. This is not mentioned anywhere in the lead, and yet it seems to have been a huge part of her life. Perhaps also mentioning that she was the second person to be awarded the Agnes Hoppin Memorial Fellowship or the first woman to speak before the Archeological Institute of America would be interesting, as these are important milestones in her life.

I think the content and the tone and balance are altogether very good. I do not think there are any big things that need to change, and I think neutrality was achieved while a lot of information was portrayed. However, a space is needed within the title of the book Gournia,Vasiliki and Other Prehistoric Sites on the Isthmus of Hierapetra between Gournia and Vasiliki, and it seems like several of the sources in the "References Collection: Harriet Boyd Hawes Papers | Smith College Finding Aids" section were the same sources added multiple times. Additionally, a couple of the pages seem to be more blog post websites, including the first one from that section, and so if the same information could be found from a more reputable source, that might be better.

The page is well organized, though the academic career section could be split into two if you could find a place to split it, as it is quite a long section. Additionally, there were a lot of nicely added pictures, though I feel like the "This is an aerial view of the Gournia Excavation Site." caption could be shortened to "Aerial View of the Gournia Excavation Site" and I think a new picture of the Aegean Sea is needed as the map used currently is a bit too blurry.

Overall though, I do believe that this page does look a lot better and more complete. Good job!