User:Gallaz63/Kendama/Xqchen9 Peer Review

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General info

 * Gallaz63
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Gallaz63/Kendama

Lead

 * The lead has been updated to reflect the new content added. It has a well-summarized introduction to the toy, making readers easy to develop a clear overview of the topic.
 * The sentence talking about how modern kendama style is influenced by other skills in the lead is taken out. And I notice that you added an evolution section to the main article. Are you going to talk about the modern kendama more detailedly in that section, so that you took the sentence in the introduction part out? Or was it that the sentence in the lead conveyed wrong information?
 * The new picture in lead section looks nice!

Content

 * Content added is relevant to the topic. It is up-to-date and can really help readers to develop a more comprehensive and in-depth understanding.
 * I like how you added the different competitions styles & evolution of kendama, letting people know how traditional object is fitting into the contemporary time.

Tone and Balance

 * The content added is neutral. Viewpoints are not either biased nor over/under-represented.


 * You may want to be careful while writing the competition part, as the previous one is marked as possible advertising.

Sources and References

 * You may want to reconsider whether to use the kid website one. Otherwise, the sources are valid and reliable!

Organization

 * The contend added is well-written, doesn't seem to have any grammatical or spelling errors.


 * Rules could go after Structure and Terminology.
 * Rules section is also a bit messy. For instance, reasons why people play kendama and how they are participating in competitions could go under a sub-section under Competitions.
 * Origins, precursors and parallels could use some more details. Maybe make a comparison and briefly introduce how this kind of "ball and cup" games are doing in other cultures?

Images and Media

 * The images and media are well-used.
 * You could check out this wiki article written in other languages for images and media. For instance, the Chinese version has all those images for different gestures, which I found really interesting to see: 截圖_2020-01-31_下午4.02.27.png