User:Gau268/Wilderness Act/MathStudent24 Peer Review

General info
Rudrud2121; Gau268
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Callum Gau/Wilderness Act
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Wilderness Act

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead


 * Good use of active voice.
 * Could move the citation to the 3rd sentence since it provides stats and facts as well.
 * 3rd sentence - could say "establishing" instead of "creating"
 * Concise, informational

The 88th Congress


 * Nice minor edits
 * Could possibly put in a citation if you can find one... maybe after the 30 "musts"

Legislative History


 * 1st sentence - change "setting a start" to "setting the stage" or "kicking off"
 * 2nd sentence - change "It was passed" to "The bill passed"
 * Last sentence - change "showing" to "demonstrating"
 * Nicely done. Good info and organization

Uncertainties


 * 1st sentence - change "opposition movements" to "opposing movement"
 * 2nd sentence - Is there anyway to link to Wikipedia pages for the Sagebrush rebellion/Wise use movement
 * Really nice paragraph. Strong closing sentences.

References


 * I think you're good to remove the bullet points under the references before publishing the page.
 * Sources are reliable and are used throughout the article.

Overall


 * Tone is neutral - good job presenting the divide with politics in this way
 * Could add some pictures into the main article, maybe include Zahniser and an area of wilderness, like the BWCAW
 * If you're looking for more edits, maybe update the numbers from "Statistics" since they're from 2014