User:Gau268/Wilderness Act/PsychSoc2027 Peer Review

General info
Gau268 and Rudrud2121
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Callum Gau/Wilderness Act
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Wilderness Act

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * The lead has been updated and rewritten in an active voice. The rewrite does a good job of reiterating what exactly the wilderness act is and adds a proper citation in order to not plagiarize.
 * they provided sources and references for the new information that they included.
 * they corrected grammar and sentence structure in paragraphs.
 * they edited the "uncertainties" section, adding citations and more sentence structure making it a more coherent paragraph
 * For the most part the content is neutral but there is parts where they are starting more towards the side of being in favor of the Wilderness act when they are supposed to upkeep a neutral tone towards the topic. Where it says "big deal" in legislative history, that should be neutralized because not everyone would have felt that way and you want to utilize neutral language
 * a section could be added on how the wilderness act affects life today
 * overall the article could use some more updated information on the Wilderness Act, how the legacy of the act has carried on and the impacts it has on the world today, etc.
 * The content added does improve the article but again it could use some more updated information on the "now" of the Wilderness Act because the article itself touches on the history for the most part
 * You could edit the "50th anniversary of wilderness" section as it is not very coherently written and could use some more information on the future of the wilderness act