User:Gaw39938/Data sanitization/T0b0rx0r Peer Review

sorry my initial comments were pertaining to a different student.

I wasnt able to discern a difference between your sandbox and the original article. Please confirm what work you've added or changed.

You should be able to see the updates now, I had been working the policy section in word first. I've transferred to bulk of it over while I'm still working it, so you can review, Thank you. Gaw39938 (talk) 21:04, 26 June 2021 (UTC)

Overall Impressions


 * Overall good work.
 * Content appears to be relevant to the original article
 * Tone and use of citations need some additional focus.

Suggestions


 * While the tone of the content didn't reflect advocacy I wouldn't consider it neutral. (in my opinion) Your addition reads more like an essay than an encyclopedia entry. I would suggest making it more fact/report oriented based on specific citation than conclusionary.  For example instead of making a claim that because data sanitization is common but not well understood...thus the need for data sanitization....I would reword as "Data sanitization is not consistent within government (cite).  NIST guidelines including SP 800-blah blah recommend a policy and methodology be used within government (cite)".  I'm not an expert so I would suggest checking in with Dr. Dona on this point.
 * Example of in proper tone
 * "Thus, the need for a comprehensive Data Sanitization policy in government contracting and private industry is required in order to avoid the possible loss of data, leaking of state secrets to adversaries, disclosing proprietary technologies, and possibly being barred for contract competition by government agencies. "
 * While your work contains citations not all your assertions appear to be cited.
 * Examples of assertions that should be cited
 * " While the practice of data sanitization is common knowledge in most technical fields, it is not consistently understood across all levels of business and government. "
 * "This step is critical to the core Information Security triad of Confidentiality, Integrity, and Availability"
 * " failure to follow these recommended sanitization policies may result in severe consequences, including losing data, leaking state secrets to adversaries, losing proprietary technologies, and preventing contract competition by government agencies. "

Hope this is helpful......

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