User:Gbalic/Gertrude Kerbis/Ksoto12 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing:
 * Myser, Gbalic, Carolinelamarjewell


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * Gertrude Kerbis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):
 * Gertrude Kerbis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Date: 2/23/21

Sandbox Draft

 * I personally really liked how the Sandbox draft was constructed because it very clearly stated what the existing Introduction and Design Style Section was said prior and what the group plans to incorporate.
 * As well as adding reliable sources and images to support the content that will later be added to the article.
 * The group was very mindful to change key words that would better support what was said as well as supporting statements.

Article

 * Not much words have been added to the article yet, but the Sandbox Draft shows that those are the changes the group will add to the article.
 * All content added and existing is relevant to the topic of Gertrude Kerbis and her life.
 * I would personally suggest adding a link to important people and places such as "Walter Gropius, Mies Van Der Rohe, Carl Koch.." especially if this place or person had significant impact on Kerbis herself.
 * Adding where Kerbis is from in the Introduction would give more context to how was her upbringing and how that eventually influenced her design route and decisions.
 * Most links do not appear to be working and "citation needed" thus indicating that there are uncited claims that have been written to the article. Finding reliable and neutral sources will be best when citing to ensure all that has been said is true.
 * Possibly adding a bit more information about her personal life such as if she was the only child, or how her relationship with her family influenced her career choice. Or how having immigrant parents made her work even harder to be an architect and eventually working with under some of the most influential and incredible architects in design history.
 * Can make "Education" and "Life" their own separate paragraph sections, possible starting off with her early life and talk about more about her family and how the environment she lived in impacted her.
 * Then transition to education and begin to talk about what schools she studied, what degrees and/or certificates she received, and who she worked with while studying or working.
 * After "Early Life" and "Education" transition to her more personal life such as who she married, if she had any children, where she lived after she got married, how married life changed her, and how getting a divorce changed her.
 * The "Career" section of the article is very well developed as it mentions the projects she has worked on, awards she received, and groups that she was associated with. I would suggest adding dates (month, day, and year) to those that do not currently have one if it is possible to find.
 * Adding if there was any colors, shapes, or textures that inspired her work and why they were significant to her.
 * Few punctuation errors that can be fixed such as capitalization on titles, especially the last word.
 * Introducing the Bauhaus School of Art and if that architectural style had any impact on her and her work, especially studying under Walter Gropius.
 * Adding images would most definitely help enhance what is being said and would help the viewers know how Kerbis looks like today or then. As well as adding images of her work to help viewers understand her concept of Modernism.