User:Gclarke2103/Women in Chad/Rosenberg22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Gclarke2103)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gclarke2103/Women_in_Chad?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Women in Chad

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi Grace,

Thanks for adding to such an important and underdeveloped Wikipedia article. You did a good job at adding new sections that were completely missing, especially the adolescent pregnancy and women in politics. You bring in a lot of good evidence and information that provides a more complete picture of women in Chad. Although this topic can easily be written about from an advocacy lens, you did a good job at staying "neutral" and stating the facts. There were some important things I think would help the article. I would definitely recommend reworking the lead section, to more completely reflect the entire article. This would entail referencing the new sections you added in conjunction with what is already there. Also the first sentence is a bit awkward and could better summarize the article (for example, Women in Chad are an important yet disproportionately repressed group due to adolescent pregnancy, a culture of polygamy, lower access to education and economic opportuneness) I assume you will be expanding the section on women's culture which would be amazing, some picture here would be a great addition as well. Adding new info about more recent literacy rates would also be great as the data in the article goes up to 2004(a little outdated). The SENAFET section too could use some history and policy decisions which reflect the values you mention.

The last major thing I think you should address is that some of your remarks are not easily linked to a source. For example, the section on polygamy has no citation, only links to terms. This also happens after some paragraphs which have no citation, like the first paragraph of adolescent pregnancy or the last one of women in politics. The good rule of thumb is have at least a citation after every paragraph, but ideally after every evidence based statement like "the presence of quotas for women in government is a relatively new practice, and is part of a greater women’s rights and gender equality movement that has grown in popularity over the last decade." This is probably true from your research but I do not know without a citation. Also with the section outlining historical political figures, linking them to other wiki articles is great, but you still need citations from other sources which can't just be Wikipedia. Hope these comments help (and sorry if they may have come off as harsh, not my intention)