User:Gcon00/Alex Steinweiss/Darthsungam Peer Review

I think the paraphrasing you did of the early life topic was done well, and was a great separation from the copied source article. However, make sure to include the hyperlined subjects in the new revision. Things like warsaw, east Manhattan, and brighton beach. Hyperlinks apply to all the other paragraphs.

I think the added citation from Jim flora is well done, and relevant.

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