User:Gdpanassol/Mechthild of Magdeburg/JKhader Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gdpanassol (Gabrielle Panassol)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gdpanassol/Mechthild of Magdeburg
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mechthild of Magdeburg

Evaluate the drafted changes
Upon first impression of Gabrielle's Wikipedia revisions on Mechthild of Magdeburg, she clearly focused her intervention on the "Composition" section of the page where she extensively expanded it with details on Mechthild's book The Flowing Light of the Godhead. Despite the rest of the page remaining essentially untouched—the time, effort, and consideration that Gabrielle dedicated to these revisions are unquestionable for she has nearly doubled the content of Mechthild's page with her research.

All the additions Gabrielle made to this Wikipedia page were backed by multiple references. Through her revisions on just the one section, the reference list for the whole page doubled and numerous works cited were added. This work serves to validate the page and give it more credibility.

The goal of Wikipedia is to write in as neutral a tone as possible. Reading this from my pure neutral position, I felt that there were some points that read as leaning analytical rather than simply descriptive. Considering that the content is a literary text and analysis is in the nature of literature, the analytical tone is subtle, for example, "This interaction is much more of a submissive and loving one rather than a violent and harsh one." This is not to say that there is no valid academic significance in the point Gabrielle made with this sentence (because there is), but simple rewording can make it read as less analysis.

One area that I believe Gabrielle could pursue moving forward is to see if any of her research can be contributed to any other sections of Mechthild's Wikipedia page. However, her choice to focus on one section of the page does align with Wikipedia guidelines suggesting that small or gradual revisions are preferred. This is worth pointing out because there is a likelihood that these revisions can be accepted in the long term. Overall, this is a great start, and I found myself genuinely interested when reading the content! The implications of Gabrielle's contributions cannot be understated because the original state of Mechthild's page dedicated a mere two sentences to her most notable text. Gabrielle's commendable work is a direct solution to the inequitable preservation of Mechthild's literary legacy. By actually detailing and providing great context for The Flowing Light of the Godhead, Gabrielle has made it clear why Mechthild is a notable historical figure and has revised the page to reflect that to the unaware reader.