User:Geisinsj7254/Texas blues/Thonhn0943 Peer Review

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 * Review of Geisinsj725

Lead
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 * Did a good job showing what was there before, and the changes they will want to make
 * Could've been more clear on an explanation of what they were looking to convey, but i think for the sake of the final product, it's adequately conveyed in their work
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Are there any sections you would like to create? Or perhaps you'd like to split the body into different headings??
 * This might lend itself to wiki a bit more.

Content
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 * Content is neutral
 * Could be updated to extend beyond the 80's?

Tone and Balance
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 * Focuses on the roots pretty well, but I'd like to see a bit more depth in the current section (Paragraph 4). Certainly the commercially successful blues-rock bands had an influence, but what about influential underground acts that had an impact?

Sources and References
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 * Links seem to work.
 * Looks like there could be a few more citations

Organization
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 * Well Written and in-depth
 * Some of the terminology could be a bit hard to understand to an outsider of musical terms (12-bar, 3 line)
 * Split it up into time periods??? (Suggestion, but I would recommend splitting it up somehow)

Images and Media
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 * Are you looking to add some pictures?? or audio examples??

Overall impressions
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 * Certainly improved it very much from the original, in my opinion. And includes good examples/ names/ terms.
 * If you are looking for more to add, I think it could be effective to touch on the earlier styles of Rhythm and Blues or Gospel and how it transitioned into the Texas Blues Style