User:Gek21/Ableism/Ginsar08 Peer Review

General info
Gek21/Ableism
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gek21/Ableism?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template :https://docs.google.com/document/d/16xxyIkW2-Jr4CXMBK4g4d_HG818mqg-UB6Bnybq3P1Y/edit (more detailed comments here)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Ableism

Evaluate the drafted changes
I have added more detailed recommendations on the group's Google Doc, but here is a summary of my comments:

Overall, these sections convey important information substantiated by quality secondary sources. Organization is a particularly strong part of this article draft. Some sentences could be rewritten for neutrality and clarity, but there is nothing extremely biased in the information. Make sure to also cite each claim—there were a few sentences without citations, which makes it unclear where the information is coming from. I would recommend finding additional sources to complement the existing work and make sure that multiple perspectives are included. Real-life examples of societal impact and resistance might strengthen that paragraph. Additionally, it might be helpful to include other authors in the Campbell's Framework section to indicate other perspectives on the topic.

Great work!