User:Gemjk19/Performing arts/Thomas Lazuli Quickdagger Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Gemjk19 Link to draft you're reviewing  https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gemjk19/Performing_arts?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template  See Evaluation  Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)  Performing arts

Evaluate the drafted changes
The author has not written enough to create a whole evaluation of their changes, so I will review their changes and then review the article in an attempt to generate ideas for other changes.

Drafted changes:

The editor has taken an underwritten piece of content(Iran) and has added to it significantly, including citations. Pictures will be an ideal way to further add to the Iran section if there are images available. The writing is clear, there is sufficient content and the sources are credible.

Article as it stands:

The article lays out 13 types of performing arts. However, the article only has sections for 3(dance, theatre, and music). This could be because these are the main three forms of performance art, but if that is the case, then the Types section should explicitly mention this.

The lead is competently written and does not need improvement.

Other than the Type section disparity, the sections are laid out in an understandable order, grouped by region rather than time period to reduce confusion. There are a few subsections of the Eastern section that should be added too if possible, including Thailand(more content/images), Cambodia(images/citations), and Iran(which is currently being worked on by the editor).

The main focus of improvement, however, should be on the major sections: History of African performing arts, History of performing arts in the Americas, and History of performing arts in Oceania, all of which are currently devoid of content despite being major sections.

The tone is relatively neutral throughout, seemingly with no underrepresented populations/topics.

The sources are relevant, accessible, and as modern as possible(most of the article is about the History of Performing Arts, so not all sources are from recent years but most are).

To summarize, the sections most in need of improvement are the final three major sections, with other options being the subsections of the Eastern Arts section.

Thank you for suggesting other sections in the article that could be changed. Also I never noticed that there are 13 types of performing arts included and only three are touched on in the actual article. Perhaps I can bring this up in the Talk page.