User:Genderx/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?

 * 1) https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Education_of_immigrants_in_the_United_States
 * 2) https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Educational_inequality

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?

 * 1) I chose this because it fit my area and sector very well. It might be more of the area, and less of a sector, but is the perfect article to edit with respect to my practice experience.
 * 2) I chose this article because it gets into the inequalities in education, whereas the first article talks more about education as a whole / the importance of education.

Evaluate the article

 * 1) Education of immigrants in the United States
 * 2) Lead section
 * 3) There is no clear sentence at the beginning summing up the article
 * 4) There is no description of the articles main sections
 * 5) It doesn't feel as though the lead section does what it is supposed to, that is, be a tldr of the page
 * 6) Content
 * 7) I like the sections that have been included so far. I think there needs to be a section added that deals with different types of immigrant education, both traditional and non-traditional and their reception. There could also be a section addressing the lack of focus on meeting the need and rather talking constantly about the "problem" of immigration
 * 8) Tone and balance
 * 9) The tone appears to be fairly neutral and I see no problems there.
 * 10) Sources and references
 * 11) Needs to be more references, particularly research journal references rather than website pages, etc.
 * 12) Organization and writing quality
 * 13) It feels organized but not very logically so. I don't know if all of the sections are needed, such as "Immigration" and "Economic inequality within United States' immigration". These and other sections address how education level is linked to immigration and economic inequality in immigrant communities, but I feel the article should focus more on:
 * 14) the stats of immigrant and refugee education
 * 15) what are the common threads in immigrant communities arriving to the US as far as education goes
 * 16) different approaches to immigrant and refugee education
 * 17) data on successfulness of these approaches
 * 18) an interrogation of success as a measure
 * 19) The other sections of the page could be organized around and within this list, and I think that would make it easier to follow
 * 20) Images and media
 * 21) There could be more media and charts. Right now the page reads like a long essay, rather than an encyclopedia entry
 * 22) Talk page discussion
 * 23) the talk page seems to feel much the same as I, that the topics covered do not fall under the title "Education of Immigrants in the United States"
 * 24) They seem to propose changing the title to fit the content, but I want to change the title slightly to "Immigrant and Refugee education in the United States" and change the content as I have mentioned above.
 * 25) Overall impressions
 * 26) This article needs work and I really want to shorten it and make it clearer and easier to follow along with.
 * 27) Educational inequality
 * 28) Lead section
 * 29) the lead section has a defining opening sentence which is great
 * 30) it feels too long though, I would prefer that it be shortened so that it takes up only a paragraph or two
 * 31) it does a good job of laying out some of the things that it is going to be talking about, but it needs to be more succinct
 * 32) Content
 * 33) The article mostly focuses on education within the US and has sections for other countries, but this doesn't agree with the title which implies more of a global perspective.
 * 34) There needs to be more about gender and education that includes gender-nonconforming people
 * 35) Tone and balance
 * 36) The tone seems alright. I don't have an issue with it.
 * 37) Sources and references
 * 38) There are many references and most of them are research grade, so that's good.
 * 39) Organization and writing quality
 * 40) This also reads more like an essay than an encyclopedic entry. I don't think that there needs to be direct references to the names of the researchers when citing them, but a focus on the content.
 * 41) organization is alright overall. But this is a very long article. I wonder if there could be some topics that are moved to another page?
 * 42) Images and media
 * 43) There is a major lack of images and media on this page, in part contributing to the essay feel.
 * 44) Talk page discussion
 * 45) the talk page discussion reiterates much of what I've said here. Someone also wants to add a section on education types, similar to what I wanted to do for immigrant education in the us.
 * 46) Overall impressions
 * 47) This article has many contributors and that's a good sign, but it doesn't feel very high-quality. Needs a lot of work to get there.