User:Gfs634/Dura-Europos synagogue/PalmyranRealness Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gfs634


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gfs634/Dura-Europos synagogue


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dura-Europos synagogue

Evaluate the drafted changes
The primary issue is going to be figuring out how to naturally incorporate this 100% newly written information into the article as it exists now. Making a separate category within Wall paintings that makes it clear you're describing just the Moses section of the wall paintings is what I would suggest.

The lead should maybe be updated to briefly describe which figures are depicted in the wall paintings, since that is the section you are expanding.

There might be some level of "lopsidedness" in the article after posting your changes, but I still feel like having more information is better than not having information about the object at all, even if it feels asymetrically prioritized.

There should be more in-line citations, and hyperlinks to outside pages. The information in the top paragraph relating to how to interpret the schematic on wikimedia should just be put into the image caption itself.

I would also watch out for putting in visual analysis that is your own interpretation. If it's not something that can be sourced or something that is self-evident visual description, it shouldn't be put in the article.

The article is definitely "more complete" with your additions, especially the added schematic. The only way to improve it would be to extend this visual description to the wall-painting as a whole, and maybe go beyond the scope of your object- the full page is missing any kind of discussion around the discovery of the synagogue and just cuts straight to a description of the site. That's kind of crucial to the article and not present.