User:Gheizer/Ethiopian art/Inexperienced Egg Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gheizer


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gheizer/Ethiopian art
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ethiopian art

Main response to article:

 * Brief introduction of the Muslim city of Harar is very helpful for contextualizing these Islamic manuscripts; a very useful addition!
 * Are the "parallels" between the Khalili Qur'an and other Harari codices evidenced in your analysis of the manuscript (end of second paragraph)? Or is this just a formal analysis of the Khalili Qur'an? You may want to be a bit more general. Could you identify similarities between Khalili Qur'an and other Harari texts more concretely (ie. do these appear in other Harari Qur'ans as well? What are the characteristics of Harari manuscripts?) Additionally, is there academia on the materiality and production of manuscripts in Harar?
 * Like the discussion of the script and the growing literature on Ajamization, especially in the way you relate it back to Islamic texts by the Harari people. Were manuscripts often written in Ajami? Or was it just religious texts?
 * Very interesting to see the potential influence of other regions on these texts!
 * Could you speak to the lack of academic literature on Islamic manuscripts in Ethiopia a little more? Why is that? Additionally, I do think this is relevant to the article Ethiopian Art, but you may want to add it under another section rather than in your discussion of Islamic illuminated manuscripts.

Additional points:

 * Rather than a separate section, could this be a sub-section under Types, titled "Islamic illuminated manuscripts"? The last sentence in the sub-section "Other arts and crafts" transitions well into your topic!
 * Rather than saying "scholars," is there a specific group of scholars (ex. a research group, an institution, a region) or individual scholar you're referring to?
 * Copyedit: grammar, especially usage of commas and semi-colons; run-on sentences; usage of adverbs (ex. "also" and "as well" in same sentence)

Overall, this is very good!