User:Gianna U

Hi, thank you for visiting my page. My name is Gianna. I am currently a junior in high school. In my free time I enjoy capturing and editing pictures of my friends, nature, and animals. I also like to draw and paint pictures. I hope to graduate with my Associates degree, and I do this by working hard and staying determined.

Wikipedia will be a suitable way to explore and expand my knowledge of my favorite musical artists. My favorite part of wikipedia is the feature that allows you to make a small contribution to any page you want. It's like making a small contribution to someone or something that can have important meaning in your life.

= Article Review = Ever since I was little, makeup has peaked my interest. Being an artist, it related to my hobbies of painting on a canvas. My face was the canvas and the makeup was the paint. One of the first lipsticks I ever recieved was from the company MAC Cosmetics. In curiosity I visited the MAC Cosmetics page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: Disorganization, Lack of information, and not up-to-date.

Disorganization
While reading I noticed some of the information wasn't in the correct spot. In the "Background" section, the last few sentences talk about collaborations between Selena and Ulta. Those should have been talked about in the "Collaboration" section of the wikipedia page. The "Background" section also briefly talks about MAC Cosmetics' ranking in the makeup industry. I feel like there should be a new section talking about MAC Cosmetics' achievements as a business and the description should be put there.

Lack Of Information
This article did a good job of describing the background of MAC Cosmetics and how it started, but It doesn't talk about much else. I feel like they could have described so much more about MAC Cosmetics then just its history. Like how they produce their makeup, where they sell their makeup, whether or not they animal test their products etc. Also, they have a whole section for "MAC AIDs fund". They should have made a new section talking about MAC's charity contributions and discussed the AID funds in the paragraph. The AID funds alone are not important enough to have a whole section contributed to it.

Not Up-to-date
I noticed some sentences speak in future tense for events that have already happened. One example is when the article talks about Ulta making MAC products available to purchase in stores. It says "Products will be available in stores in June 2017." It should be worded "Products became available in stores in June 2017." This same problem is shown in the "Collaborations" section of the article. When talking about Nicki Minaj's collaboration with MAC Cosmetics, the wording "These will go on sale...", "...on September 21, 2017..." is incorrect. This wording shows the article has't been updated since before June.

Summary
Overall, this article needs to be edited and researched more in-depth. They described the background of Mac Cosmetics effectively but failed to put some pieces of information In the correct places. It failed to give much information on Mac Cosmetics other than the history and a few collaborations. It also lacks current events and correct wording due to not being up-to-date, which would make for a better, more informative article.