User:Gigisokay/The West Wind (Gould)/ArtHistorianStudent Peer Review

General info
Gigisokay
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gigisokay/The_West_Wind_%28Gould%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I really enjoyed reading your article. You have set the article up well by identifying your sculpture and explaining the material of marble, the historical significance of being the Greek Goddess, and explaining the notability behind the sculpture. The location of the sculpture being in the MAG is at the conclusion of your second paragraph - but, I think it may make more sense to move this sentence to the beginning of your first paragraph so that the reader immediately knows the location of the statue. Additionally, the concluding paragraph in your opening section is a good start but - seems incomplete. I am curious why the sculpture is very expensive and why this information is relevant.

Technically, there are areas in the article that could be edited grammatically and rephrased. For example, the topic sentence in the third paragraph states "The sculpture's global fame and popularity stems from the style of his statues; American loved the Neo-classical style that was exhibited from the statue." Who is "his" - is it the artist? I think in this sentence it may also be helpful to link the term "Neo-classical" to another Wikipedia page that defines the term.

Overall, I think this is a great start. When looking to progress the article, make sure to add references for all of your outside sources and double check spelling and grammatical errors.