User:Gisselle Islas/Marie Louise Bottineau Baldwin/RedTrolley654 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gisselle Islas


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Gisselle%20Islas/Marie_Louise_Bottineau_Baldwin?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Marie Louise Bottineau Baldwin

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think this group had a hard task of essentially creating a Wikipedia page from scratch. The amount added is huge. You all did an amazing job expanding the page. I agree with putting Family and Education as the first sub-header. I like the expansion you give her there. Creating a dedicated area for her Native American advocacy efforts is great! I honestly do not have any critiques thus far. The data seems to be presented in a neutral manner, grammar seems good, overall flow is massively improved. If I had to nit pick it would be the intro summary good use some more heft but that is not your fault it is the lack of information being readily available in the time allotted for this assignment. Given the overall amount of data on her y'all did a great job!