User:Gisselolzba/The Female Man/Kgroft Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gisselolzba


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gisselolzba/The Female Man


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Female Man

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The first section of the lead article is the same. The second section of the lead article has been edited to be better understood by the reader. The first sentence of the lead concisely tells us what the article topic will be and what to expect. There are a couple of links and one citation to help us understand even further.

Content:

The content in all sections are relevant and is used to clarify what the story is about concisely and without bias. The information is up to date and with the changes, it seems the author was able to limit the original articles sense of bias through the changes they made (though, this topic, even when writing with neutrality in mind, would be hard to summarize without the overall viewpoint of the novel itself interfering with how the author of the article would sound toward the topic).

Tone and Balance:

As I said, the updates and edits made help to alleviate the sense of a bias. I don't see any persuasion within the text, nor do I see any strong viewpoint trying to lead the reader to an opinion about the novel, or the topic the novel is writing about.

Sources and References:

They added two new sources that help to back what was added to the article. They are reliable, current, and reflect the overall topic very well. The links and citations both work.

Organization:

The article is organized well. The sections are broken down well to help elaborate on what the story is about. No section detracts or distracts from the goal of the article. I don't see any grammatical errors (but I'm terrible at grammar), and nothing stands out that deters from the fluidity of the reading.

Images and Media:

There are no images or media on the edited version, but I did see that there was a picture of the novel on the original article, so I guess it doesn't matter?

Overall Impression:

Good and informative read. I understood what the novel was about in very good detail. It was fluid and entertaining. C- Just kidding! A-... not quite a A+.