User:Gissygis/Lhtako/Zfelis Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gissygis


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gissygis/Lhtako


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lhtako

Evaluate the drafted changes
You do seem to include a lead but adding more information in general will be helpful to understanding this topic. The original article already seems to introduce the topic but more information and pictures will make it stronger.

Towards the end it feels a bit biased as it seems like you are implementing your own thoughts which we need to stay as neutral as possible throughout the article.

The links provided all work, and they were properly explained. You should note that while writing about these articles you can formulate a proper citation, so you do not have to write the full website.

There is a lot of new information that you added compared to the current version of the article now, but the structure is hard to follow. Everything is put together so it would be helpful to categorize the information into certain sections that make sense.


 * Try using subheadings and add the descriptions under them. For example, one can be about their history, events, agreements, etc.

You mentioned a specific image, but it was not clear if it was from a specific website that you cited before. The original article does not have any images so it would be helpful for this topic to add some.


 * A map of where the Lhtako tribe is located along with the images that show this community would be a good addition.

What you wrote did improve the original article and after you add more key factors like any interactions with other tribes, an important figure, etc. will make this more complete.