User:Glandram/Compulsory sterilization/Birthhealer00 Peer Review

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User:Glandram User:JKatavi71


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 * User:Glandram/Compulsory sterilization


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 * Compulsory sterilization

Evaluate the drafted changes
I really enjoyed reading your article about compulsory sterilization as it closely relates to my article on African Americans and birth control. The lead of your article on compulsory sterilization is thorough and covers each of the topics that are later mentioned in the article, including justifications that are widely used to normalize forced sterilization. The article discusses the realities of forced sterilization in the many countries around the world and not just the United States. I appreciate that your additions were not focused solely on sterilization in the United States and that you shed some light onto the state of these issues in other nations, such as with the genocide and placement of Uyghurs in concentration camps.

There are a few areas where your additions to the article could be improved. In the section discussing forced sterilization of Uyghur women it would be useful to reword the sentence involving electric torture of Uyghur women to state the act is not considered direct sterilization. Stating that it simply is not sterilization and then explaining the intended outcomes of that abuse is somewhat contradictory. In the section discussing Kenya, it may be useful to remove some statements before submitting a final draft. The section regarding Kenya's history is not relevant to the topic unless it is focused on the history of sterilization and other forms of reproductive abuse and control in the country. The part proposing an addition to the section on South Africa is biased and not neutral in providing information on sterilization in the country. The quote that is used in this section is very useful, but it is not placed in a way that contributes to the statements.

This article covers many important points on compulsory sterilization, but there may be a few additions that could make this article even better. In the lead, multiple rationalizations for compulsory sterilization are discussed, including population control, gender discrimination, and ethnic genocide, however there is not much discussion on the intersection of these issues which is the focus of reproductive justice. In the section discussing affected populations it would be useful to expand upon the women affected to include Black, Indigenous, and Hispanic women. You could also add another part to that section discussing race and sterilization or expand upon that in the section for the United States. Racism has played a major role in the widespread sterilization of Black women in the United States, but the reproductive health of African American women is never mentioned in your article. There is also potential to discuss how organizations that are now focused on reproductive choice and equity began with eugenics and racism in mind, such as Planned Parenthood.

Overall, this is a great draft of material to add to the article on compulsory sterilization. The article covers many topics, however some of them are not covered with as much detail as others. The inclusion of more information relating to reproductive justice in the United States and the groups that are targeted by this abuse would change the scope of the article greatly.