User:Glo.rriaa/Islamic feminism/Leil4hhh Peer Review

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(Gloria)
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Hi Gloria! Overall, your writing is well written and couldn't find many things to fix. Your writing follows all the checklist requirements. Some minor changes I would say to consider is perhaps adding subheads for "Challenges Faced by Muslim Women" and "Activist Efforts for Gender Equality." I feel like this would maybe make it easier for others reading this article a bit easier. Another minor change would be changing the wording a bit such as "don't" to "do not", we want to make sure the tone of the writing is formal. Also, maybe try to include the links to the articles your referencing if you could, if you can't then just disregard this. And use Grammarly, to fix the grammar errors and you should be good. Awesome job! :))

Lead:
Has an introduction to the topic that describes what the writing is about. Could add a short description about the points or topics you will mention in the writing. Overall has a concise layout about the and even provides examples to illustrate a point.

Content:
All content added to the topic are relevant to the subject and are up-to-date. The article does relate to the Wikipedia equity gap and does address to underrepresented population. The examples provided about the Indian activist group petitioning against discriminatory practices and the impact of Quebec's Bill 21 on Muslim women in Canada, adds more depth to the discussion and gives an audience a better understanding about the topic.

Tone and Balance:
Overall the tones seems to be neutral and gives examples without any bias and fairly represents the issues about the topic at hand. Although, there are some areas that can use a bit more clarification such as the "Muslim women are often the ones in more danger" when writing about the Quebec's Bill 21, this part could benefit better if there is some evidence to support this claim.

Source and References:
The sources that are referencing in the writing are relevant to the topic and are reliable to source.

Organization:
Overall the writing is well-written, concise, and easy to read. There are a few minor grammar errors that can easily be fixed and maybe could perhaps add some transitions between the paragraphs to make it sound smoother and improve the better overall flow of the reading.

Images and Media:
No images were used in this writing.

Overall impressions:
Very well done! This writing I feel has improved the overall quality of the topic by using relevant sources about the subject and are up-to-date information about Muslim women's fight for equality.



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