User:Gloriasiyoungkoo/Illinois confederation/Peterpietri Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)
 * Gloriasiyoungkoo
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:Gloriasiyoungkoo/Illinois confederation

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Yes. The user has made an exhaustive expansion of the original article, as it used to be very short and incomplete. The revision by the user brought in a substantial amount of new information, which is reflected in the Lead, so as to include a proper overview of the article in its entirety.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * The Lead does include a concise introductory sentence. However, it could be rewritten just to be a little more clear of an introduction to the article's topic. The Lead doesn't necessarily define the Illinois Confederation, which is a group of 12-13 tribes. That piece of information comes later in the lead, but I think it could be moved to the introductory sentence to more clearly define the article's topic.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Yes, the Lead includes a brief description of the article's major sections. All overview information is covered in a succinct manner.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * No, the Lead does not include information that is not present in the article.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * The lead is very concise and to-the-point.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes, all content added serves to more-thoroughly describe the Illinois Confederation.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Yes, all content added is up-to-date.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * No, there is no content that does not belong. I don't believe there is any content that is missing, as I did not perform extensive research on the topic and do not know content is out there in regards to the Illinois Confederation. If it exists, the user could include information regarding any art or literature of the Illinois Confederation, which could be included in the Culture section of the article.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?
 * Yes, the article covers the Illinois Confederation, which is a grouping of indigenous peoples— a historically underrepresented population.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * For the most part, all content added is neutral. There are some instances where it appears like information is being synthesized, and there is one instance where the user uses the first person narrative. More in-depth advice for this is covered on my feedback given on the user's talk page. But, for the most part, the article is neutral.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No, there are not any claims that appear heavily-biased toward a particular position.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No viewpoints are either overrepresented or underrepresented.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No, the content added does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another. Again, the article as a whole is rather neutral and there are no attempts to persuade.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * There are considerable portions of stated fact that are not backed up by a citation. For example, the Interactions with Europeans subsection under the History section has only a single citation at the end of the rather lengthy portion of writing. It is important to ensure that all statements of fact are followed by a citation so any readers can go to that source and confirm if that specific claim is true or not.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * For the most part, the sources reflect the available literature on the Illinois Confederation. However, the user relies on a few websites for a majority of the article and does not include many journal articles/books. I'm sure if some more-reliable sources were included, the user could prevent any opposition or editing wars when inserting the updated material.
 * Are the sources current?
 * A majority of the sources date from between late 1990s-early 2000s. However, given that the majority of the Illinois Confederation has dwindled down into a single tribe, the Peoria, there is not much current literature in regards to the Illinois Confederation, as the confederation as a whole does not really exist and thus there is no updated information.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * A majority of the sources come from an Illinois State Museum, whose articles have no attributing author. I would recommend finding more reliable sources, perhaps whose authors are descendants of the Illinois Confederation, so as to properly provide a diverse spectrum of authors.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes, all links appear to work.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * For the most part, the content is very well-written. There are some areas where the verbiage can get a little wordy (in the Naming section), but for the most part, the article is clear and concise.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * There are a few spelling errors. For example: "Though chiefs had the authority of political power and were widely respected by the people, the egalitarian society of the Ilinois presented a more democratic envrionemnt in which important decisions thst affeced the community were made by tribal consensus. It was only through the espansion..." (under the Leadership subsection of the Government section).
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * Yes, the article is very well-organized as it breaks down the information regarding the Illinois Confederation into distinct chunks, such as History, Culture, and Government.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * n/a
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * n/a
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * n/a
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?
 * n/a

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * n/a
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * n/a
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * n/a
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?
 * n/a

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * Yes! The updated article is much more informative and in depth regarding the Illinois Confederation. The previous article was inadequately short and provided a scant amount of information. The revision made the article much more thorough and organized, and thus a more cohesive whole.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * The content added brought light to a lot of the cultural components of the Illinois Confederation, as the previous article did not thoroughly explain the cultural aspects of the Illinois Confederation. Additionally, the user added more in-depth material regarding the history of the Illinois Confederation and demonstrates how interactions with Europeans dwindled down the population into what it is today, in the Peoria Tribe.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * The content could be improved by adding in some more reliable sources to prevent any edit wars, as well as ensuring that all statements of fact are backed up by one of these reliable sources. In addition, making sure to remove any areas of first-person narrative, wordiness, and any spelling errors.