User:Gmckay1/sandbox

Hi Kirby,

Below are my critiques of your work on the October Revolution article. Please share them with your partners!

Add citation or remove the [citation needed] info

“These Western Historians” - can you find at least some examples of the historians and historiography referred to in this paragraph?

*** Address [citation needed] tags in info box, lead paragraphs***

Good work so far. Have a great week!

Cassandra DellaCorte

Wikipedian in Residence

Special Collections and Archives

DePaul University

cdellaco@depaul.edu

Found a lot more citations to add into the Later Soviet Portrayal. Changed wording and will edit some chunks of text in the Wikipedia page because a paragraph of text is not relevant to the later soviet portrayal.

However, a part of the text goes like this: A Red Guard named Adamovich remembered gasping as he burst into the palace, as he had never before seen such luxury and splendour. A small group broke in, got lost in the cavernous interior, and accidentally ran into the remnants of Kerensky's provisional government in the imperial family's breakfast room. The illiterate revolutionaries then compelled those arrested to write up their own arrest papers. ---there is no evidence that I can find to prove that this thought occurred.

I will change it to discuss the "storming" of the winter palace instead.

My group plans to edit the October Revolution Wikipedia page by adding sources to the page, and to add extra sources to fix and improve the October Revolution page.

What I plan to do on editing Citation 26 will be rewriting the concept of the few sentences because the source for the citation is not found, and doesn't link to anything. Therefore, it is my job to find information similar to what is in the paragraph and to rewrite, re-cite the information and move forward.

"Jaan Anvelt, a Bolshevik supporter and leader, helped to establish Bolshevik power . However, the political power of the Bolsheviks in Estonia never grew to more than the capital and few other towns .  The other government party that was present in Estonia was the Estonian Provisional Government, which eventually claimed independence on November 28th, 1917, later declaring independence on February 24th 1918 ."

Some more citation editing that I can do include placing page numbers to citations from books. For example, Citations 21 and 22 all have errors in the sense that page numbers are not listed within the book citing. I found all the page numbers!!

Citation 21: Service, Robert (1998). A history of twentieth-century Russia. Cambridge, Massachusetts: Harvard University Press. ISBN 0-674-40347-9 PAGE 65. Citation 22: Reed, John (1997) Ten Days that Shook the World. New York: St. Martin's Press. --Citation A: PAGE 217 --Citation B: PAGE 369 --Citation C: PAGE 410 --Citation D: PAGE 565

Unfortunately, for Citation 25 I couldn't find the page number; however, I found another source that says around the exact same thing and with a page number. Vanguard of the Revolution: The Global Idea of the Communist Party by James McAdams, written just recently in August 2017 states that same concept cited in the previous explanation. However, this citation comes with a page number which is page 77, and the fact that this citation has an accurate page number improves the October Revolution article.

I worked on citations from John Reed, (Ten days that shook the world) as well as citations from Robert Service's book (A History of Twentieth-Century Russia) and also about the meaning of the addition of the word "red" in a citation that talked about where all these factories had the word "red" in their names. I also added sources about Estonia's independence.