User:Gmd114/Armed Forces of National Liberation (Venezuela)/Totoama Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Gmd114


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gmd114/Armed Forces of National Liberation (Venezuela)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Armed Forces of National Liberation (Venezuela)

Evaluate the drafted changes
In regard to the edits to the original article, the addition of sections exploring the activities of FALN and a famed leader of the group are appropriate additions. The information is important to the article as a whole and key in connecting the different sections. However, avoid the use of direct quotes from sources, instead opting to relaying the information provided in your own words. Additionally, it might make more sense to reorganize the sections of the article, so the article flows better. Following up the information of the groups background with information of the groups activities might make more sense than the current layout. Leaving the section on Ojeda at the end would be best and would also allow you to incorporate more sections on other key figures to the end of the article.

Tone and Balance: the content appears to be neutral and unbiased. In the section of terrorist activities of FALN it may be important to incorporate information on the consequences of those actions was well as any reactions to those actions.

Sources and references: While a lot of key information added was cited from appropriate sources, I suggest diversifying your sources and including various sources that provide similar information. This would reinforce the information provided as well as add to its credibility and allow for additional perspectives.

Furthermore, Try to be more concise in the writing. A lot of the information added may feel wordy and confusing the readers without any previous knowledge on the subject. For example, in the following sentence: "Terrorists had turn to political targets, for instance, on September 13 there was an attempt to break up a meeting of Betancourt's Democratic Action (AD) party in Caracas which was held to observe the party's 22nd anniversary." it may be more efficient to avoid the use for "for instance" and opt to split the sentence into two separate sentences. "FALN also targeted political figures and events. On September 13..."