User:Gmd114/Polita Grau/Totoama Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Gmd114
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Gmd114/Polita Grau


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Polita Grau

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: In the lead, focus more on information on Polita Grau directly rather than adding information strictly on Operation Peter Pan. Try to summarize the other aspects of the article as well. This will be easier if you expand further on the rest of the article as a whole as well.

Content: The section on academia does not really provide any important information as it stands. Try to expand on this section further maybe adding some information on what education Polita may have received that led her to her career choices if possible. In the section on her political involvement try to expand on her political activities, maybe adding more information on her involvement in operation Peter Pan. This section relies heavily on her arrest and what she did while in prison, more info on her political involvement out of prison would serve to balance this section. That being said, the additions made in this section are appropriate and add important information related to the figure. Expand on the section discussing her legacy by discussing the results of Op Peter Pan and how her politics may have influenced further policy.

Organization: the information about her release from prison should follow the paragraph discussing what she did while imprisoned.

Tone and balance: I outlined above in what ways some of the content may not have been balanced yet, but despite that I have no further comments. The tone is neutral and the content is fairly balanced.

"n 1965, Grau and her brother Ramon were accused of being CIA spies because of their work in Operation Peter Pan. She was also accused of involvement in a plot to poison Castro with a milkshake. They were tried, and each was sentenced to 30 years in prison, particularly for their connections with the CIA, espionage, and attempting to overthrow the Castro government." This section in particular is redundant.