User:Go23bears/User:BriannaJohnston/New sandboxacupuncture/Go23bears Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

BriannaJohnston


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:BriannaJohnston/New sandboxacupuncture


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Acupuncture

Evaluate the drafted changes
You do a good job writing neutrally and summarizing what the sources are saying. The second and third paragraph are primary about the NADA technique and study. I found the separation of the second and third paragraph confusing. Would you consider making a subsection just centered on the NADA method and their findings and success with the 3 to 5 point therapy? Or organize the paragraphs of your work so that everything about NADA stays together. Most of your work quotes Stuyt and Voyles, adding a third source about substance abuse and acupuncture would strengthen the content you've written so far.