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 * Hi very sorry for the extended delay.  I've had a chance to go through everything and I've got the following concerns, which hopefully you can address.

Legacy section
This is quite mixed containing elements which have great degrees of variance in significance.


 * The mention of Guthrie and Sinclair is significant and noteworthy but I don't see Hayes' song as part of legacy, it was written during the strike (I would move it to sections above). It is significant though that Hayes later went into Colorado politics and worth mentioning.
 * The fact that this subject has the attention of academic researchers is not a legacy. (Describing Howard Zinn as "controversial" is use of WP:Weasel). I would drop this whole paragraph. The reference to Mary Thomas O'Neal is the first time she appears in the article, but she should be included in the sections dealing with the massacre and aftermath.  Her article has material which could be used.
 * I would make the Ludlow monument a subsection itself (i.e. ====Ludlow monument==== ). The text needs some copyediting.  The picture of the monument is excellent, I would drop the text from the paragraph about the vandalism, shorten and add to the caption.
 * The last paragraph is WP:UNDUE and WP:RECENT, perhaps if a newspaper of record, e.g. the New York Times, had carried such an editorial it might be noteworthy. Should be dropped.
 * However, what's missing here and what most studies mention is the historical impact of the strike on the US. Walker provides a good summary: "Although the miners lost the Colorado strike, it was and still is seen as a victory in a broad sense for the union, the United Mine Workers of America (UMWA) (Foner 1980; Fox 1990). The Coal War was a shocking event, one that galvanized U.S. public opinion, turned John D. Rockefeller, Jr., into a national villain, and eventually came to symbolize the wave of industrial violence that led to the "progressive" era reforms in labor relations (Adams 1966; Gitelman 1988; Crawford 1995). Coal miners in Colorado did ultimately see some material gains."  In particular, this point about influencing subsequent reforms in labor law is probably the most significant legacy.