User:GonFreecss999/Great Dismal Swamp/Spookysmoothie Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

GonFreecss999 and Louistheyounger


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:GonFreecss999/Great_Dismal_Swamp?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Great Dismal Swamp

Evaluate the drafted changes
Firstly, I agree that it is important to include information about the Great Dismal Swamp Maroons in the intro section, since it only focuses on preservation and wildlife currently. I think you could add more than just one sentence to this part since it is such an important aspect of the swamp, and include a source as well.

The history section is the best place for the information you are adding, however you could even expand to add a new section about slavery and how it is related to the swamp. Since there is already a page about the Great Dismal Swamp Maroons, the section could go more in depth about the concepts you already are talking about (the different ways that enslaved people, not just the Maroons, viewed the swamp, i.e. hope/danger etc, also the different ways white people viewed the swamp).

This sentence I think could be reworded to make a bit more sense:

The Great Dismal Swamp contrastingly was seen as an area of fomenting maroon rebellion by the white controlled governments nearby, this was fueled largely by wealthy land and slave owners in the area, eager to keep the power structure static.

--> Contrastingly, the white-controlled governments nearby viewed the swamp as an area of fomenting maroon rebellion. This view was fueled largely by wealthy land and slave owners in the area, eager to keep the power structure static.

From a readers view, I think this is a bit clearer to flip the sentence structure like that.

Good start, keep it up!