User:Gooobster/Writing in the Early America/Marshfrancis14 Peer Review

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Gooobster


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

-You definitely need to work on the lead. Try to find some sources or a source for the lead that introduces either a study or a description of writing in Early Americas.

-Possibly add a brief part about writing in Mesoamerica, Colonial America, and the early days of the US. ￼

Content

-I like each heading and I think it gives a good way to order the content into each time period.

-I think that the Mesoamerica section is introduced well

-Maybe you could talk about how people discovered old Olmec and Mayan writing and how any of that writing is still alive today, so maybe try to find a source or two specifically about the origins of this      writing or the Cascajal block.

-For colonialism, I think that you could try to find a source about how the people living in the Americas, recently coming from Europe, effected literacy in the colonies.

-For Early America, I think that you could even use the article that we just talked about in class and discuss women gaining literacy in that time period in the early Americas.

Tone and Balance

-the tone of the writing that is there is good, I think that so far, the article is written neutrally and expresses the information in the sources well.

Organization

-I think that the article is well organized, I like the way the Mesoamerica section of the article is written.

Sources and References

-I think that the sources are relevant and are good sources, but I think you should add a few more to help you get more content for the page.