User:GooseJanus/Cleisthenes/CDD2112 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

GooseJanus


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:GooseJanus/Cleisthenes?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cleisthenes

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Good addition of sources to content that was lacking in the original article.

I recommend adding more to the lead, but you mentioned that you already plan on adding more to the first few paragraphs.

Content

Good biography, not much needed addition, but the additional source you provided at the end was needed.

I am assuming you are not making any additions to the "Rise to Power" section, however, I would recommend trying to find additional sources for this section if possible.

The additional background you added into the section "Contribution to the governance of Athens" regarding the deme system is very beneficial as it adds another source along with more information about the deme system.

Linking to different Wikipedia articles is a very important thing to do. You do a good job of this, but there are a few that you may have missed. One that I noticed was the word "Satrap" came from the section "Attempt to obtain Persian Support (507 BC)". Someone who is unfamiliar with this topic may not know what this is and a link to another Wikipedia Article may be beneficial to them.

The additional interpretations as to why Cleisthenes instituted specific reforms you mentioned adding in the future will be very beneficial to the reader.

Sources and References

You do a great job of adding sources where they are needed, however, I would recommend trying to find more (if possible) to help add to some statements that are lacking sources. I struggled finding a lot of sources, so I understand if you can't find sources for every statement. Even just one or two sources could make a difference.

Organization

I really liked the different sections as they do a good job showcasing Cleisthenes contributions to Athens.

Images and Media

I liked the addition of the image of the ostraca that were commonly used for ostracism. I feel as it is something that would help someone better understand the concept of ostracism, if they were unfamiliar with it.